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another little snippet... playing with some characters here. [Oct. 7th, 2005|11:19 pm]
Dark & Edgy Writers Wanted


i don't think i've ever been this tired. can you carry me home?
no, but i can hold your hand.
no, really, i'm tired.
you can sleep in my arms.
i don't think i'm going to make it.
you've made it before.
this time's different. i'm tired.
no it's not. you don't remember.
just put one foot in front of the other.
i can't.
somebody will see me.
i'm the only one who's looking.
you're not enough.
i can try.
i'm tired.
i know. it's been a long trip.
was i really up there?
yeah, i think you were.
but i'm scared of heights.
i'll catch you.
you'll watch me fall.
i'll catch you.
i'll slip through your arms.
i'll catch you.
i'm falling.

[User Picture]From: afingertipruse
2005-10-08 11:05 pm (UTC)
The fact you're using punctuation but not capitalization bothers my eyes but, besides that, not a bad poem. It's interesting.
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