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another little snippet... playing with some characters here. [Oct. 7th, 2005|11:19 pm]
Dark & Edgy Writers Wanted

no_use_4_tears

[four4time]
i don't think i've ever been this tired. can you carry me home?
no, but i can hold your hand.
no, really, i'm tired.
you can sleep in my arms.
i don't think i'm going to make it.
you've made it before.
this time's different. i'm tired.
no it's not. you don't remember.
please.
just put one foot in front of the other.
i can't.
why?
somebody will see me.
i'm the only one who's looking.
you're not enough.
i can try.
i'm tired.
i know. it's been a long trip.
was i really up there?
yeah, i think you were.
but i'm scared of heights.
i'll catch you.
you'll watch me fall.
i'll catch you.
i'll slip through your arms.
i'll catch you.
i'm falling.
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[User Picture]From: afingertipruse
2005-10-08 11:05 pm (UTC)
The fact you're using punctuation but not capitalization bothers my eyes but, besides that, not a bad poem. It's interesting.
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